大学英语四级作文谚语名言类.ppt 19页

题型分析之一------谚语警句型 Para.1(一般三句话）1.点明文章要阐述的谚语或名2.用自己的话解释这一谚语或名言的意思3.论点句,表明自己对这一谚语的观点态度Para.2（一般六句话）A.支持性的细节分论点（至少两个论点；举例子证明，可以用正反两方面的逻辑）B.从事实引出结论，再说明论点Para.3（一般二至三句）conclusion:阐明其现实或更深远意义 句型1.AnEnglishproverbsays,Asthesayinggoes,Oneofthegreatmenonceremarked,Nearlyeverycivilizationhasitsownequivalenttotheproverb,Aninspiringproverbechoinginmymindgoes,Oneofthegreatmenonceremarked,“Healthisabovewealth”.(没有必要用一对引号）改为：Asthesayinggoes,healthisabovewealth. 第二句Itmeansthat…Inotherwords,…第三句Itgoeswithoutsayingthat/Itisobviouslyclearthat/Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat 例子1.Asthesayinggoes,healthisabovewealth.1.Oneofthegreatmenonceremarked,lifewithouthealthislifeless.1.Nearlyeverycivilizationhasitsownequivalenttotheproverb,lifethatlackshealthlackseverything.2.Itmeansthathealthisofthetopmostimportance/valueinourlife.2.Itindicatesthatmakingmoneyatthecostofhealthisnotworthwhile.2.itmeansonlypeoplewhoareingoodhealthareabletoleadameaningfullife.3.Icannotagreewithitmore.3.Thoughtheproverbconveysomesense,Icouldnotfullyagreewithit. 第二段论点：1.Healthisthefoundationofaqualitylife.Withoutagoodbody,theaccomplishmentswemade,therelationshipwekept,thesocialstatuswetryhardtobuildwillbecompletelyuseless.例子：StevieJobs,CEOoftheAppleCompanybusinessmanwhoworksohardthathecollapseeventually/arichmanwithseverehealthproblemsMyfriends/myfather/myself 例子：StevieJobs,CEOoftheAppleCompany(Letus)TakeStevieJobforexample.TakeStevieJobasanexample.Imaginehowmuchmorehecouldhavedonetotheworldifhehadnotdiedatsuchayoungage?(虚拟语气/反问句式)TakeStevieJob,formerCEOofAppleCompanywhodiedattheageof56. 论点Agoodbodyissomethingthroughwhichweareabletoexperiencetheworld.例子Arichpatient(出不了门的/坐轮椅的—confinedinawheelchair/confinedtohisroom)Steviewonder/StephenHawkingMyfriends/myselfTakeStevieHawkingforexample.Anintellectualgiantasheis,thegreatmanundoubtedlymissesopportunitiestoexperiencethephysicalworldforhisparalysis.Whatapity!说理Withoutagoodhealth,wecannottravelorstudy,thusopeningourmindandenrichingourlife. 论点3：Ifapersonalishealthy,hetendstoholdamoreoptimisticandmoreconfidentviewtowardstheworld.说理论点4：healthisamongafewthingsthatcannotbeboughtwithwealth.说理 History/Oursocietyaboundswiththeexamplesof…Edison/Columbus/EinsteinSuchexamples/instancesmightbegivenindefinitely,butthiswillbesufficienttoshowthat…Ontheotherhand/Onthecontrary,if…Thereishardlyamanwhocanachievesuccesswithout…Allevidencepointsto/justifies/lendssupporttothefact… 结论Foruscollegestudents,thesaying/proverbhasaprofoundandrealisticsignificance;Justimaginehowfarcanwemakeinouracademicstudy,ifwedon’thaveastrongbody?Fromwhathasbeendiscussed/mentionedabove,Tosumup, 范文1(第一段）Asthesayinggoes,lifethatlackshealthlackseverything.Itmeansthathealthisofthetopmostvalueinourlife.Icannotagreewithitmore.(3句)(第二段）Firstofall,healthisthefoundationofaqualitylife.Withoutagoodbody,theaccomplishmentsonemade,therelationshiponekept,thesocialstatusonetriedhardtobuildwouldturnintonothingnesseventually.TakeStevieJobasanexample.Hecouldnolongerenjoythefruitofthehugeaccomplishmentshemadeafterhedieduntimelyat56.Furthermore,Agoodbodyissomethingthroughwhichoneisabletoexperiencetheworld.Withoutagoodhealth,onecannottravelorstudy,thusopeningourmindandenrichingourlife.Moreover,muchevidencepointstothefactahealthypersontendtoholdamoreoptimisticandmoreconfidentview,andcanfitintothesocietybetter.(7句)(第三段）Tosumup,Healthcomesbeforeeverything.(1句) 范文2(第一段)Haveyoueverheardoftheproverb,withouthealthlifeisnotlife,lifeislifeless?Itmeansonlypeopleingoodhealthconditioncanenjoyameaningfullife.Thoughitconveys/carriessomesense,Icouldnotfullyagreewithit.(3句）第二段AsfarasIamconcerned,importantashealthis,themeaningoflifedoesnotlieinhealth.论点1：Manypeopleofill-healthaccomplishgreatthingsinlife.TakeZhangHaidiforexample.Despiteherdisability,shetaughtherselfandmasteredquiteafewforeignlanguagessuchasEnglish,JapaneseandGerman.Sheturnedintoasuccessfultranslatorandauniversitygraduateeventually.Canyousaythatherlifeislifelessormeaningless?Definitelyno.(论点2)Furthermore,poorhealthsometimesisablessingindisguise.StephenHawkingonceremarked,notuntilhewasdiagnosedwithAIS,anincurabledisease,didhebegintoreallyfocushisattentiononhisrealinterest-spacecosmology.Therealizationthathisdaysarenumberedhelpedhimthinkreallyseriousabouthisresearch.第三段Tosumup,Ithinkthemeaningoflifeliesnotinhealthbutinmanyothers. 具体评分标准8分——基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。8-11分：句子意思清楚，没有或者几乎没有语法错误，逻辑连贯。但是简单句较多，最多出现一句较容易的定语从句或者强调句，且说理啰嗦，中心不够突出。11分——切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。11-14句子意思清楚，没有或者几乎没有语法错误，逻辑连贯。说理重点突出，紧凑清楚，能够灵活且正确运用多种句式。14分——切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较强。基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。亮点 其他类似的题型 题型分析话题写作（Topicwriting）针对某一社会现象，分析原因并论述你的观点。一般会给出中文提纲，要求按照提纲的顺序写作。提纲的结构一般是：现在存在某一现象（对现象本身进行描述）分析造成这一现象原因或是现象会带来的影响我的观点 社会现象/新事物第一段如何写？1.点明文章要讨论阐述的事物或现象2.我对这个事物或现象的基本看法3.赞成的理由因为其重要性(或反对的理由因为其危害性)（更加具体的阐述自己的观点） 题型分析实例1–2012年6月真题WriteacompositionentitledOnExcessivePackagingfollowingtheoutlinebelow:目前许多商品存在过度包装的现象出现这一现象的原因我对这一现象的看法和建议 题型分析实例2–Modeltest4WriteanessayonthetopicStopSpoilingYourChildren.Outline:现在，独生子女越来越多，溺爱孩子的现象非常普遍无原则溺爱孩子有很多害处我的观点